Peer Review 20401 강덕현

Before i start peer review, Heewon, number 3 didn't write any essay.  
So i did peer review of Duk hyun's essay who is number 1 inevitably.

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4, 내용도 흥미롭고 자신의 주장에 대한 의견들을 뒷받침 해줄 수 있는 자료가 매우 많았지만 글의 흐름에 대한 구분이 잘 가지 않았다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
다 좋지만 순서를 잘 정리해서 물 흐르듯이 매끄럽게 쓰면 될 것 같다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
.Early childhood education is not effective.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
네

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
나도 Early childhood education is not effective로 똑같이 주장했을 것이다.

Any other thoughts?
내가 커서 애기를 낳으면 이른 교육보다는 체험이나 활동을 많이 하면서 더 애정을 쏟아야 겠다는 생각이 들게했다.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
네,하지만 뭐가뭔지 잘 구분이 안감.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
네, 처음부터 신빙성 있는 자료를 제시하며 인트로를 시작하니까 확 와닿음.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
네

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
네

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
네

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
네

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
순서구분을 확실히

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
동의

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
안바뀌었습니다.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
잘 한것 같아서 없는 것 같음. 나도 동의하는 입장이기 때문에

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
네

Is the research from appropriate sources?
네

Are the sources obvious?
네

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
없습니다.