Saturday, December 6, 2014

FINAL DRAFT

Final Draft

 "Music is the universal language.", John Wilson said. Like this, as well as John, many people consider music as something essential and important in human life and mind. What almost people do when they are depressed or need to refresh themselves for many reasons? What people do when they are boring during the time in the public transportation or some other places? They listen to music putting on the earphones everywhere and anytime. Even some students who try to solve some math problems listen to music despite of universal bias that listening to music can disturb concentrating on math study. Also, many people who are listening to music when they are in public transportation, walk on the street or wait someone can be seen easily in our eyes. In addition, many places such as restaurants, department stores and even school turn on some music in accordance with each ambiance or characteristics. Like these examples, music bounds up with human in modern society. Moreover, Friedrich Nietzsche said "Without music, Life would be a mistake"Like he said, music has settled in our society deeply for a long time. Music has an influence on people in the world regardless of their gender, age, background and it is connected with human mind making them feel a variety of feelings in a good way. Generally music influences variously on human mind leading many surprising things. So, music has considerable effects on human mind.

 Music has been from the past to present and will be in the future with various forms. According to the documents, the most isolated tribal groups have had a form of music. And it means that music is likely to have existed in the ancestral period and it proves that music may have been existed for at least 50,000 years and then evolved to become a fundamental constituent of human life. Also, we need to know how the brain has the ability to recognize the music. When the tempo or the tone of music is heard or altered, different portions of the brain are stimulated which have neural connections that detect the characteristics or mood of the songs. The effect of music on the neural connections make certain areas active when different types of music are played even though it is different from individual to individual. Processing different rhythms, tones, melodies, requires multiple areas of the brain to be active. And then it can also influences on human mind through brain. Here are some examples of effects of music on human mind that played one of the basic actions through some greatest people in our history. 
 First, Thomas Jefferson who has written the Declaration of Independence is one of the case who influenced by music. Thomas Jefferson declared that music is the favorite passion of his soul and he loved music. When he could not find correct wording for a certain part of it, he listened music as well as played the violin to help him come up with the words from his brain onto the paper.
 Second, Albert Einstein is the second case of the greatest person who was influences by music. Albert's parents bought a violin for him instead of following the school's advice that he was too stupid to learn and it would be a waste of resources for the school to invest energy and time in his education. Then he became a fantastic performer of the violin and music helped Albert Einstein become the greatest music lover as well as great performer of the violin. Einstein himself said that the reason he was so smart was because he loved music through playing the violin. Besides, a friend of Einstein said that the way Einstein figured out his problems and equations was by improvising on the violin. It means music made him relieve and concentrate on his tasks despite of hard childhood, harsh life and it led him to be a greatest scientist.
 As we can see the cases of the greatest people, it has turned out that a moderate noise level of the music can improve creativity. The way this works is that moderate noise level increase processing difficulty which promotes abstract processing, leading to higher creativity. In other words, when we struggle to process things as we normally would, we resort to more creative approaches. Even it looks paradoxical slightly, music can improve creativity. 

 There are many positive effects of music on human mind that exert amazing results.
 First, music can effect on human mind with the social aspect. Music is a basic phenomenon created in society interacting with people. Numerous songs are releasing everyday and people enjoy newly released music as well as old popular music. In this situation, people feel a sense of unity and belonging within a certain community. For example, in the 1990s, the singer group 'SeoTaeJi and boys' was criticized because their songs were difficult and didn't fit with Korean culture. However, after a month, they changed the current of Korean music market and become the idol of teenagers. One of their song, Come Back Home especially rippled huge social effects. After the song was released, teenage runaways whom even police couldn't find and the parents couldn't make them come back home actually came back home by themselves. In this case, teenage runaways' mind felt sense of belonging and accepted the song to their mind and situation.  

Second, the right music can put somebody in better mood and soothe emotional confusion related to breath and blood pressure. That's because music can express people's feelings better than any other medium. A new study reported in Heart, a British Medical Journal publication, has shown that listening to fast music increases blood pressure, whereas listening to slower music has the opposite effect. People who have listened different 6 kinds of music proved this facts. Also, people generally breathe 25~35 times for a minute. But the speed of breathing becomes different in accordance with the music people listen to. Deep and slow breathing can make people control their feelings, do deep thinking, undergo better metabolism change. Music can achieve these amazing things.

 Third, music has the ability to ease the pain. In fact, according to a paper in the Journal of Advanced Nursing, music can reduce chronic pain by up to 21%. The paper reports that 60 patients participated in a controlled clinical trial and were subdivided into two groups — music and no music. The results suggest that people who listened to music for an hour each day for a week had improved physical and psychological symptoms compared to those who didn't listen to music. So those days, people made music therapy that can accomplish individual goals within a therapeutic relationship by a professional who has finished an approved music therapy program.  Music therapy uses music and all of its facets—physical, emotional, mental, social, aesthetic, and spiritual—for clients' physical and mental health such as cognitive functioning, motor skills, emotional development, social skills, and quality of life by using music experiences such as free improvisation, singing, and listening to, discussing, and moving to music to achieve treatment goals.

 Lastly, music training can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. As well as listening to music, learning how to play musical instrument also related my topic and influence on human mind. One study showed that children who had three years or more musical instrument training performed better than those who did not learn an instrument in auditory discrimination abilities and fine motor skills. They also distinguished themselves better on vocabulary and nonverbal reasoning skills, which involve understanding and analyzing visual information, such as identifying relationships, similarities and differences between shapes and patterns. There two areas in particular are quite removed from musical training as we imagine it, so it's fascinating to see how learning to play an instrument can help kids develop such a wide variety of important skills. 

  Some people can say that music makes people feel distracted and there exists high possibility that people's concentration can be dispersed easily when they are being absorbed in something. However, it is not always true. It can be different accordance with which song a person listens to. For example, listening to classical music when people are depressed or frustrated, it can be efficient for them to relieve and restore quite. In addition, opponents would say that some study says certain kinds of music make people feel likely to commit a suicide. For example, a song named 'gloomy Sunday' are regarded as the most mysterious song ever. In Paris,1936, one of the members of the orchestra that performed gloomy Sunday has committed a suicide with a gun and there were no people left after finishing the performing. However, it isn't also always true. In a world where we live now, there are happier and more delightful music such as dance music, pop song and rock that convey happiness and pleasure to people than the song like gloomy Sunday. People tend to listen delightful music than gloomy music. So the opposition's opinion isn't logical.

 As we think about our daily lives, music is always with us and it will be in the future,too. People gain lots of benefits from music. Music music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music interact with people expressing people's feeling and is a basic phenomenon created in society. People feel sense of unity and belonging as enjoying numerous songs released everyday. Music can put somebody in better mood and help get out of emotional confusion allowing controlling breath and blood pressure. Also music has the ability to ease the pain and people are developing methods to make full use of music to relieve the pain such as music therapy. Moreover, music can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are stronger power in the future as well as present. So music has  positive considerable effects on human mind. 


References
John Wilson (Nocted Ambrosianae (1822-5))
Friedrich Nietzsche quotes from BrainyQuote.com.
Belle Beth Cooper(http://lifehacker.com/how-music-affects-the-brain-and-how-it-benefits-you-1469597259)
Anisha Chirmule(http://serendip.brynmawr.edu/exchange/node/206)


Peer Review 20404김지우

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
5, 내용도 매우 흥미로웠고 내용구성도 좋았으며,읽는 과정에서도 재미있었다.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
잘했음

Thesis
What is the thesis?
Students' various emotions affect the lesson differently and teachers should use them properly in class. 

Is the thesis clear and debatable?


If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
지우랑 똑같이 썼을 것 같음,

Any other thoughts?


Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?


Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 


Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?


Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?


Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it 
adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?


Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 


What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?


Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
.agree
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
not chaged

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
잘해서 어디를 고쳐주어야 할지모르겠음.

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 


Is the research from appropriate sources?


Are the sources obvious?
네..................................................................................................................................................

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네..................................................................................................................................................

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
없음..................................................................................................................................................

Peer Review 20401 강덕현

Before i start peer review, Heewon, number 3 didn't write any essay.  
So i did peer review of Duk hyun's essay who is number 1 inevitably.

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4, 내용도 흥미롭고 자신의 주장에 대한 의견들을 뒷받침 해줄 수 있는 자료가 매우 많았지만 글의 흐름에 대한 구분이 잘 가지 않았다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
다 좋지만 순서를 잘 정리해서 물 흐르듯이 매끄럽게 쓰면 될 것 같다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
.Early childhood education is not effective.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?


If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
나도 Early childhood education is not effective로 똑같이 주장했을 것이다.

Any other thoughts?
내가 커서 애기를 낳으면 이른 교육보다는 체험이나 활동을 많이 하면서 더 애정을 쏟아야 겠다는 생각이 들게했다.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
네,하지만 뭐가뭔지 잘 구분이 안감.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
네, 처음부터 신빙성 있는 자료를 제시하며 인트로를 시작하니까 확 와닿음.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?


Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?


Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?


Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 


What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
순서구분을 확실히

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
동의

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
안바뀌었습니다.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
잘 한것 같아서 없는 것 같음. 나도 동의하는 입장이기 때문에

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 


Is the research from appropriate sources?


Are the sources obvious?


Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?



Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
없습니다.

Sunday, November 16, 2014

Second Draft

Second Draft

 What almost people do when they are depressed or need to refresh themselves for many reasons? What people do when they are boring during the time in the public transportation or some other places? They listen to music putting on the earphones everywhere and anytime. Even some students who try to solve some math problems listen to music despite of universal bias that listening to music can disturb concentrating on math study. Also many people who are listening to music when they are in public transportation, walk on the street or wait someone can be seen easily in our eyes. In addition, many places such as restaurants, department stores and even school turn on some music in accordance with each ambiance or characteristics. 

 Like this, music bounds up with human in modern society. Moreover, Friedrich Nietzsche said "without music, life would be a mistake"Like he said, music has settled in our society deeply for a long time. Music has a anonymous influence people in the world regardless of their gender, age, background and it is connected with human mind making them feel a variety of feelings. Generally music influences on human mind variously leading many surprising things. So, music has a considerable effects on human mind.

 Music has been from the past to present and will be in the future with various forms. According to the documents, the most isolated tribal groups have had a form of music. And it proves that music is likely to have existed in the ancestral period prior to the dispersal of humans around the world and it means that music may have been in existence for at least 50,000 years then evolved to become a fundamental constituent of human life. There are some examples of effects of music on human mind that played one of the basic actions through some greatest people in our history. 

 First, Thomas Jefferson who has written the Declaration of Independence is one of the case who influenced by music. Thomas Jefferson declared that music is the favorite passion of his soul and he loved music. When he could not find correct wording for a certain part of it, he listened music as well as played the violin to help him come up with the words from his brain onto the paper.

 Second, Albert Einstein is the second case of the greatest person who was influences by music. Albert's parents bought him a violin instead of following the school's advice that he was too stupid to learn and it would be a waste of resources for the school to invest time and energy in his education. Then he became a fantastic performer of the violin and music helped Albert Einstein become the greatest music lover as well as great performer of the violin. Einstein himself says that the reason he was so smart is because he loved music through playing the violin. Besides, a friend of Einstein said that the way Einstein figured out his problems and equations was by improvising on the violin.  

 As we can see the cases of the greatest people, it has turned out that a moderate noise level of the music can improve creativity. The way this works is that moderate noise level increase processing difficulty which promotes abstract processing, leading to higher creativity. In other words, when we struggle to process things as we normally would, we resort to more creative approaches. Even it looks paradoxical slightly, music can improve creativity. 

 There are many positive effects of music on human mind that exert amazing results.
 First, music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music is a basic phenomenon created in society interacting with people. Numerous songs are releasing everyday and people enjoy new released music as well as old popular music. In this situation, people feel sense of unity and belonging within certain community. For example, in the 1990s, the singer group 'SeoTaeJi and boys' was criticized for the reason that their songs are difficult and don't fit with Korean culture. However, after a month, they changed the current of Korean music market and become the idol of teenagers. One of their song, Come Back Home especially rippled huge social effects. After the song was released, teenage runaways whom even police couldn't find and the parents couldn't make them come back home actually came back home by themselves. In this case, teenage runaways' mind felt sense of belonging and accepted the song to their mind and situation.  

Second, the right music can put somebody in better mood and soothe emotional confusion related to breath and blood pressure. That's because music has the ability to express people's feelings better than any other medium. A new study reported in Heart, a British Medical Journal publication, has shown that listening to fast music increases blood pressure, whereas listening to slower music has the opposite effect. People who have listened different 6 kinds of music proved this facts. Also, people generally breathe 25~35 times for a minute. But the speed of breathing becomes different in accordance with the music people listen to. Deep and slow breathing can make people control their feelings, do deep thinking, undergo better metabolism change. Music can achieve these amazing things.

 Third, music has the ability to ease the pain. In fact, according to a paper in the Journal of Advanced Nursing, music can reduce chronic pain by up to 21%. The paper reports that 60 patients participated in a controlled clinical trial and were subdivided into two groups — music and no music. The results suggest that people who listened to music for an hour each day for a week had improved physical and psychological symptoms compared to those who didn't listen to music. So there days, people made music therapy that can accomplish individual goals within a therapeutic relationship by a professional who has finished an approved music therapy program.  Music therapy uses music and all of its facets—physical, emotional, mental, social, aesthetic, and spiritual—for clients' physical and mental health such as cognitive functioning, motor skills, emotional development, social skills, and quality of life by using music experiences such as free improvisation, singing, and listening to, discussing, and moving to music to achieve treatment goals.

 Lastly, music training can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. As well as listening to music, learning how to play musical instrument also related my topic and influence on human mind. One study showed that children who had three years or more musical instrument training performed better than those who did not learn an instrument in auditory discrimination abilities and fine motor skills. They also distinguished themselves better on vocabulary and nonverbal reasoning skills, which involve understanding and analyzing visual information, such as identifying relationships, similarities and differences between shapes and patterns. There two areas in particular are quite removed from musical training as we imagine it, so it's fascinating to see how learning to play an instrument can help kids develop such a wide variety of important skills. 

  Some people can say that music makes people feel distracted and there exists high possibility that people's concentration can be dispersed easily when they are being absorbed in something. However, it is not always true. It can be different accordance with which song a person listens to. In addition, opponents would say that some study says certain kinds of music make people feel likely to commit a suicide. For example, a song named 'gloomy Sunday' are regarded as the most mysterious song ever. In Paris,1936, one of the members of the orchestra that performed gloomy Sunday has committed a suicide with a gun and there were no people left after finishing the performing. However, it isn't also always true. In the world where we live now, there are happy and delightful music that convey happiness and pleasure to people than the song like gloomy Sunday. So the opposition's opinion isn't logical.

 As we think about our daily lives, music is always with us and it will be in the future,too. People gain lots of benefits from music. Music music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music interact with people expressing people's feeling and is a basic phenomenon created in society. People feel sense of unity and belonging as enjoying numerous songs released everyday. Music can put somebody in better mood and help get out of emotional confusion allowing controlling breath and blood pressure. Also music has the ability to ease the pain and people are developing methods to make full use of music to relieve the pain such as music therapy. Moreover, music can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are stronger power in the future as well as present. So music has  positive considerable effects on human mind. 

Sunday, October 26, 2014

First Draft

First Draft

 What almost people do when they are depressed or need to refresh themselves for many reasons? What people do when they are boring during the time in the public transportation or some other places? They listen to music putting on the earphones everywhere and anytime. Even some students who try to solve some math problems listen to music despite of universal bias that listening to music can disturb concentrating on math study. Also many people who are listening to music when they are in public transportation, walk on the street or wait someone can be seen easily in our eyes. In addition, many places such as restaurants, department stores and even school turn on some music in accordance with each ambiance or characteristics. 
 Like this, music bounds up with human in modern society. Moreover, Friedrich Nietzsche said "without music, life would be a mistake"Like he said, music has settled in our society deeply for a long time. Music has a anonymous influence people in the world regardless of their gender, age, background and it is connected with human mind making them feel a variety of feelings. Generally music influences on human mind variously leading many surprising things. So, music has a considerable effects on human mind.
 Music has been from the past to present and will be in the future with various forms. According to the documents, the most isolated tribal groups have had a form of music. And it proves that music is likely to have existed in the ancestral period prior to the dispersal of humans around the world and it means that music may have been in existence for at least 50,000 years then evolved to become a fundamental constituent of human life. There are some examples of effects of music on human mind that played one of the basic actions through some greatest people in our history. 
 First, Thomas Jefferson who has written the Declaration of Independence is one of the case who influenced by music. Thomas Jefferson declared that music is the favorite passion of his soul and he loved music. When he could not find correct wording for a certain part of it, he listened music as well as played the violin to help him come up with the words from his brain onto the paper.
 Second, Albert Einstein is the second case of the greatest person who was influences by music. Albert's parents bought him a violin instead of following the school's advice that he was too stupid to learn and it would be a waste of resources for the school to invest time and energy in his education. Then he became a fantastic performer of the violin and music helped Albert Einstein become the greatest music lover as well as great performer of the violin. Einstein himself says that the reason he was so smart is because he loved music through playing the violin. Besides, a friend of Einstein said that the way Einstein figured out his problems and equations was by improvising on the violin.  
 As we can see the cases of the greatest people, it has turned out that a moderate noise level of the music can improve creativity. The way this works is that moderate noise levels increase processing difficulty which promotes abstract processing, leading to higher creativity. In other words, when we struggle to process things as we normally would, we resort to more creative approaches. Even it looks paradoxical slightly, music can improve creativity. 
  There are many positive effects of music on human mind that exert amazing results.
 First, music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music is a basic phenomenon created in society interacting with people. Numerous songs are releasing everyday and people enjoy new released music as well as old popular music. In this situation, people feel sense of unity and belonging within certain community. For example, in the 1990s, the singer group 'SeoTaeJi and boys' was criticized for the reason that their songs are difficult and don't fit with Korean culture. However, after a month, they changed the current of Korean music market and become the idol of teenagers. One of their song, Come Back Home especially rippled huge social effects. After the song was released, teenage runaways whom even police couldn't find and the parents couldn't make them come back home actually came back home by themselves. In this case, teenage runaways' mind felt sense of belonging and accepted the song to their mind and situation.  
 Second, the right music can put somebody in better mood and soothe emotional confusion related to breath and blood pressure. That's because music has the ability to express people's feelings better than any other medium. A new study reported in Heart, a British Medical Journal publication, has shown that listening to fast music increases blood pressure, whereas listening to slower music has the opposite effect. People who have listened different 6 kinds of music proved this facts. Also, people generally breathe 25~35 times for a minute. But the speed of breathing becomes different in accordance with the music people listen to. Deep and slow breathing can make people control their feelings, do deep thinking, undergo better metabolism change. Music can achieve these amazing things.
 Third, music has the ability to ease the pain. In fact, according to a paper in the Journal of Advanced Nursing, music can reduce chronic pain by up to 21%. The paper reports that 60 patients participated in a controlled clinical trial and were subdivided into two groups — music and no music. The results suggest that people who listened to music for an hour each day for a week had improved physical and psychological symptoms compared to those who didn't listen to music. So there days, people made music therapy that can accomplish individual goals within a therapeutic relationship by a professional who has finished an approved music therapy program.  Music therapy uses music and all of its facets—physical, emotional, mental, social, aesthetic, and spiritual—for clients' physical and mental health such as cognitive functioning, motor skills, emotional development, social skills, and quality of life by using music experiences such as free improvisation, singing, and listening to, discussing, and moving to music to achieve treatment goals.
 Lastly, music training can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. One study showed that children who had three years or more musical instrument training performed better than those who did not learn an instrument in auditory discrimination abilities and fine motor skillsThey also distinguished themselves better on vocabulary and nonverbal reasoning skills, which involve understanding and analyzing visual information, such as identifying relationships, similarities and differences between shapes and patterns. These two areas in particular are quite removed from musical training as we imagine it, so it’s fascinating to see how learning to play an instrument can help kids develop such a wide variety of important skills.
  Some people can say that music makes people feel distracted and there exists high possibility that people's concentration can be dispersed easily when they are being absorbed in something. However, it is not always true. It can be different accordance with which song a person listens to. 
 In addition, opponents would say that some study says certain kinds of music make people feel likely to commit a suicide. For example, a song named 'gloomy Sunday' are regarded as the most mysterious song ever. In Paris,1936, one of the members of the orchestra that performed gloomy Sunday has committed a suicide with a gun and there were no people left after finishing the performing. However, it isn't also always true. In the world where we live now, there are happy and delightful music that convey happiness and pleasure to people than the song like gloomy Sunday. So the opposition's opinion isn't logical.
 As we think about our daily lives, music is always with us and it will be in the future,too. People gain lots of benefits from music. Music music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music interact with people expressing people's feeling and is a basic phenomenon created in society. People feel sense of unity and belonging as enjoying numerous songs released everyday. Music can put somebody in better mood and help get out of emotional confusion allowing controlling  breath and blood pressure. Also music has the ability to ease the pain and people are developing methods to make full use of music to relieve the pain such as music therapy. Moreover, music can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. Music's ability is infinite and it will exert its  stronger power in the future as well as present. So music has  positive considerable effects on human mind. 

Conclusion

Conclusion

As we think about our daily lives, music is always with us and it will be in the future,too. People gain lots of benefits from music. Music music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music interact with people expressing people's feeling and is a basic phenomenon created in society. People feel sense of unity and belonging as enjoying numerous songs released everyday. Music can put somebody in better mood and help get out of emotional confusion allowing controlling  breath and blood pressure. Also music has the ability to ease the pain and people are developing methods to make full use of music to relieve the pain such as music therapy. Moreover, music can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. Music's ability is infinite and it will exert its  stronger power in the future as well as present. So music has  positive considerable effects on human mind. 

Refutation and Concession

1. What is my thesis?
 Music has considerable positive effects on human mind.

2. What is the opposite position?
Music has negative effects also. 

3. What arguments can I anticipate?
a) music makes people feel distracted.(cannot concentrate on something)
b) some study says certain kinds of music make people feel likely to commit a suicide.

4. How will I counter those arguments?
a)it can be different what song a person listen to. 
b)It is not always true. People don't feel likely to commit a suicide with every songs.

My Refutation and Concession

 Some people can say that music makes people feel distracted and there exists high possibility that people's concentration can be dispersed easily when they are being absorbed in something. However, it is not always true. It can be different accordance with which song a person listens to. 
 In addition, opponents would say that some study says certain kinds of music make people feel likely to commit a suicide. For example, a song named 'gloomy Sunday' are regarded as the most mysterious song ever. In Paris,1936, one of the members of the orchestra that performed gloomy Sunday has committed a suicide with a gun and there were no people left after finishing the performing. However, it isn't also always true. In the world where we live now, there are happy and delightful music that convey happiness and pleasure to people than the song like gloomy Sunday. So the opposition's opinion isn't logical.

Saturday, October 25, 2014

The confirmation

1. What is my thesis?
Music has considerable positive effects of  human mind.

2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? 
I am using examples of famous celebrity and one of the greatest people. Also i use expert opinions and facts that occur in reality.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My argument are using sources properly with the facts and examples of scientific study. And i also have emotional part.

My Confirmation

 There are many positive effects of music on human mind that exert amazing results.
 First, music can effect on human mind with social aspect. Music is a basic phenomenon created in society interacting with people. Numerous songs are releasing everyday and people enjoy new released music as well as old popular music. In this situation, people feel sense of unity and belonging within certain community. For example, in the 1990s, the singer group 'SeoTaeJi and boys' was criticized for the reason that their songs are difficult and don't fit with Korean culture. However, after a month, they changed the current of Korean music market and become the idol of teenagers. One of their song, Come Back Home especially rippled huge social effects. After the song was released, teenage runaways whom even police couldn't find and the parents couldn't make them come back home actually came back home by themselves. In this case, teenage runaways' mind felt sense of belonging and accepted the song to their mind and situation.  
 Second, the right music can put somebody in better mood and soothe emotional confusion related to breath and blood pressure. That's because music has the ability to express people's feelings better than any other medium. A new study reported in Heart, a British Medical Journal publication, has shown that listening to fast music increases blood pressure, whereas listening to slower music has the opposite effect. People who have listened different 6 kinds of music proved this facts. Also, people generally breathe 25~35 times for a minute. But the speed of breathing becomes different in accordance with the music people listen to. Deep and slow breathing can make people control their feelings, do deep thinking, undergo better metabolism change. Music can achieve these amazing things.
 Third, music has the ability to ease the pain. In fact, according to a paper in the Journal of Advanced Nursing, music can reduce chronic pain by up to 21%. The paper reports that 60 patients participated in a controlled clinical trial and were subdivided into two groups — music and no music. The results suggest that people who listened to music for an hour each day for a week had improved physical and psychological symptoms compared to those who didn't listen to music. So there days, people made music therapy that can accomplish individual goals within a therapeutic relationship by a professional who has finished an approved music therapy program.  Music therapy uses music and all of its facets—physical, emotional, mental, social, aesthetic, and spiritual—for clients' physical and mental health such as cognitive functioning, motor skills, emotional development, social skills, and quality of life by using music experiences such as free improvisation, singing, and listening to, discussing, and moving to music to achieve treatment goals.
 Lastly, music training can improve our motor and reasoning skills significantly that are related to human mind. One study showed that children who had three years or more musical instrument training performed better than those who did not learn an instrument in auditory discrimination abilities and fine motor skillsThey also distinguished themselves better on vocabulary and nonverbal reasoning skills, which involve understanding and analyzing visual information, such as identifying relationships, similarities and differences between shapes and patterns. These two areas in particular are quite removed from musical training as we imagine it, so it’s fascinating to see how learning to play an instrument can help kids develop such a wide variety of important skills.